Poem! 'Fluid Dynamics'

[quinara]

I wrote a poem for sb_fag_ends (the DW site for which has somewhat died, I fear; sing out if you miss it and we'll try harder!). We're on Sumerian Proverbs this month, after brutti_ma_buoni uncovered a load, of which the the summary for this poem is one.

G; free of stuff needing an AO3 warning (but gloomy); Buffy POV in S6-ish; free verse with a slightly concrete edge, because I was experimenting.

I looked into the water. My destiny was drifting past.


Fluid Dynamics.

I used to stare at falling water – stare and watch it fall
I used to hope I wasn’t anywhere
                                                            at least not here
                                                                                  not now
I didn’t have a destiny
I couldn’t have
not dead                   and still
                two times
                                                  brought back.

So little did I know.




You used to stare at me when I was falling
                                                                            here
                                                                            still here
                                                                                    and now
Each night I fought you fought with me
                                    the falling, rushing parts.
We were awash and bright with steel.


                                                              Now
I feel your eyes on me – blue water
                                                              now
                                      a dark, wide blue
the gravity
is rushing me
                    to this

Was this my destiny?
To fall
                    and find you here?


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Comments

[evilawyer]

Have you looked into DW's community importing feature?

[quinara]

We haven't fully discussed it, but I've had a look into it myself, and it still looks like quite a lot of maintenance would be involved for not very little gain (we'd probably have to sort it out weekly or something, which is just another niggly task for a platform that never really got going). Also, given that most of the comm's content is provided by people not the mods, I'm not sure I'm happy with the idea of copying over everything (and all the comments) on the basis of a modly fiat, when it might be that people don't want their stuff carried over.

[evilawyer]

I'm not sure I'm happy with the idea of copying over everything (and all the comments) on the basis of a modly fiat, when it might be that people don't want their stuff carried over.

Excellent point, and one that was at peripherally behind DW's hesitation in enabling the community function, as I recall.

[quinara]

Yeah - I think it works for communities where there's a small group of people posting, but we have actually quite a large pool of posters and the last thing I want to do is alienate any of them from the comm as a whole.

[stultiloquentia]

Yay, I love your poetry. I like the repetitions in this. It's got its own little precipitation cycle. And if she starts by looking into the water for her destiny, and then, falling, becomes the water, and then goes back to looking, the implication is that she's looking into herself to find her destiny (with Spike's eyes for mirrors, a bit), which is a thought I like.

[quinara]

Thank you! I'm glad you like it. I don't know how far my reading of it gets, but I like your thoughts!

Here from buffyversetop5

[yourlibrarian]

Ooh, liked this very much!

Re: Here from buffyversetop5

[quinara]

Oh, hooray - thanks very much! :)